The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers
    高嵐
    河北省保定市保定一中323班
    Touching the keyboard and clicking the mouse is whether good or bad for people, it may difficult to tell. As the saying goes: Every coin has its two sides. Computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful. It is important to know the advantages and disadvantages of computers dearly. So that we may make full use of the computers.
    The advantage of computer is easy to see. It is no doubt that we live in a “computer age” Computers has changed our life into a more convenient and colourful one. No matter old or young, men or women, we are all absorbed by the greatest invention of the 20th century. By using computers and the Internet, so many things that once seems impossible have become possible in our life. We can use computers to help us work out difficult problems, we can use computers to get imformation and make friends, we can shop online and have lessons online. Thousands of people have benefieed from the computers. And with the development of computers, there are new kinds of jobs sened to the young generation. For me, my ambition is to be a computer engineer. I can use computer language to communicate with computers. And it's a wonderful expreince to make the cold machine think and work for you. And I also improne my ability at the same time.
    On the other heind, it isn't wise to avoid talking about the disadvantages of the computers. Firstly, it danage our eyesight. It is obvious that more and more people are wearing glasses these days, I am one of them as well. And computers can also couse other diseases to the people who have to face the computer all day long and the growihg teenagers. Second, it make more difficult to protect your personal imformation with the development of the Internt. It gives more chances to the people who want to get other's imformation to do some bad things. But, the most popular problem is still about the computer games lead the teenagers to a wrong way.
    All in all, computers are such a tool which brhgs a loe of good and cause a lot of problems. But the wise one com make the best use of it.
    專家建議：
    建議該生擴(kuò)大英文閱讀量，因?yàn)殚喿x是寫作的基礎(chǔ)，不僅可以幫助考生積累更為地道準(zhǔn)確的表達(dá)方式，更能讓該生借鑒文章段落內(nèi)部句子的邏輯嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)性。關(guān)于閱讀材料，可以選擇課外權(quán)威英文議論文讀物，如英文報(bào)紙，期刊等。這些材料中的文章語言準(zhǔn)確地道，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰工整，邏輯正確嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，時(shí)刻散發(fā)著英文理性的魅力，可以對(duì)議論文寫作提高有所幫助。
    專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：
    本篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，嚴(yán)格按照“總起—優(yōu)勢(shì)—劣勢(shì)—總結(jié)”的段落分布。語句基本連貫通順，詞匯運(yùn)用較為豐富，語法的多樣性也有所體現(xiàn)。作為一個(gè)高中學(xué)生，能具有這樣的英語寫作水平實(shí)屬不易。但是，本文中幾次出現(xiàn)邏輯錯(cuò)誤，雖然段落分布從整體來看是清晰工整的，可段落內(nèi)部句子與句子間的邏輯關(guān)系實(shí)在有待調(diào)整，更有個(gè)別句子是與文章主題無關(guān)的語句，望日后寫作時(shí)留意。