What Computers Bring to Us
    李瀟然
    遼寧省大連市遼師大附中高三2班
    With the advent of computers, the worid is changing rapidly and profoundly. The influence they bring to us is obvious and far-reaehing. Hence, people voice growing concern over what computers buing to us.
    The vital flavour that computers alo the soicety can't be ignored. In the finst place, for students, they're beneficial to our studying. By surfing or the Internet, we can gain some knowledge which can't be grasped from textbooks. In the second place, as an approach of meelia, they play a noticeable role in spreading the cultoral information. In the third place, they can simplify pleaty of work, which intensifies the capacity in the work of scientific development. Last but by no means least, computers, in my view, boost the prosperity of global economy. As is known to au, they convert the world into a village. It's just this cause that promotes the economical improvement.
    Nevertheless, every coin has its two sieles. In spite of the convinience, we should also fastea our attention upon the drawbacks. For one thing, some people are addicteel to the not real world they create. They lose therselves in it and for sure, they lose their dreams and amlitions. But the worid is just liks enchenting bubble, it's so fragile that can't stand a gentle touch. For auother, someone makes utmost of the significant influence they bring to pose a threat to the indisidual, the soicety and even the nation. What's worse, someone called locher by producing vims destys millions of computert ever.
    Weighing pros and cons, from my perspective, we can safely come to the condusion that computers contribute much to our human being to some extent, however, we ought to be confronted with the chanllenges of the moral behavions they lead to. In my eyes, only by realizing the stuff of them can we elevate the protential valus of them and create a shining tomorrow for ouselues.
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