Volunteers: an indispensable role in society
    宋思思
    江蘇省南京市南京外國語學(xué)校高三3班
    Have you ever taken part into volunteer work? Have you ever been touched by the altruistic spirit of volunteers? Have you ever found your friends much maturer after a voluntary job? It you have experienced any of the sitnations I mentioned before, you will undoubtedly agree that in this highly-developed world, volunteer work, free of any reward, does play an indispensable role which enjoys a unique significance. Through different kinds of voluntary jobs burgeon a rounded individual a harmonious family and a developed country. Numerous examples hereby listed do stand for my point of the importance of volunteers.
    The point of pinnacle importance for my view focuses on the enhancement of a single person, especially the youth. According to a survey conducted by UNESCO the United Nations, Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization, among parents and children around the world, about 95.5% of the parents admits that they find their children care more about the society after long time of volunteer work. The result also indicates the fact that 98% of, the children gets along better with their friends and coorperate with them more easily. Researchers believe that it is the volunteer work that not only develops children’s' social responsibily but also teaches them how to work in a team, which is coined as team-working spirit. In this case, nobody could deny the positive influence the voluntary jobs put on individuals.
    What is more, a voluntary job can sometimes even bring harmony and happiness to families. Generally speaking, working as volunteers gives rise to common topics among family members and makes people understand more about each other. Take myself as an example. Before, hardly could I communicate with my parents for I definitely believed big age gap made us lack of common interests. After being volunteers in an elderly home together, however we enjoy more common topics such as how to make the elderly happiness or which kind of meals is best for the elderly. To be further, Rither my parents and I realize there is a lot to learn from each other and a hanmonious family is consequently achieved. Thanks to the voluntary jobs, had we not joined in the same volunteer work, we would have never had such a satisfactory relationship.
    Bertrand Russell, a highly respected and well-known philosopher in 19th century, once pointed out ‘To a country, none of the rules is worth a voluntary action’, which dramatically matches what 1 am getting on. Rather than any rule or poliey that forces citizens to follow, a voluntary deed, largely from individuals' willing, exerts more optimistic influence on the development of a country. On one hand when people work as a volunteers, they do what they like to do while they show their social responsibility to the whole society. On the other hand, any of the significant changes involve in all citizens. Needless to say, all citizens' involvement as volunteers to some extend, enjoys a higher status than laws from a small part of people in the country.
    In light of the examples ranging from individuals, families to a whole country, we could definitely summarize that as more and more people involve into the volunteer jobs, unimaginable accomplishment achieved and a higher quality of individuals comes out. Not only does a person himself, but also a family and a country do benefit from volunteers!
    專家點評：本文作者用詞準(zhǔn)確，句型高級，結(jié)構(gòu)層次分明，難能可貴的是舉例充分且恰當(dāng)，雖然有一些小的瑕疵，但不失為一篇優(yōu)秀的文章，值得我們好好研究和學(xué)習(xí)。
    專家建議：受文化，歷史背景和環(huán)境的影響，我國學(xué)生在寫英語時喜歡拐彎抹角，喜歡長句子，喜歡重復(fù)，喜歡大話，空話?？偸菍憻o意義的理論，而很少舉例說明，多強調(diào)數(shù)量而忽視質(zhì)量，我們必須要杜絕這一現(xiàn)象，中國學(xué)生在寫作中最缺乏的一件事情就是不會舉例說明，所以平時我們要多看名人傳記，多注意和留心身邊發(fā)生的有哲學(xué)思想的事情，善于總結(jié)，日積月累，厚積薄發(fā)。