托福作文是重點(diǎn)也是難點(diǎn)，如何寫(xiě)出好的作文，就是看自己對(duì)內(nèi)容的把握，這也是很多出國(guó)人士比較關(guān)心的問(wèn)題，和出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)托福欄目小編一起來(lái)了解托福獨(dú)立作文中的個(gè)人例子怎么展開(kāi)，歡迎閱讀。
托福獨(dú)立作文中的個(gè)人例子怎么展開(kāi)
相信大家對(duì)這兩句話并不陌生：
1. Usespecific reasons and examples to support your answer.
2. Use clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details.
第一句經(jīng)常出現(xiàn)在獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作題干的最后一句，第二句則是獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的第二條?？梢?jiàn)在獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作中，例子占據(jù)一定的比重，寫(xiě)一個(gè)走心的好例子，有時(shí)候是我們提分的關(guān)鍵。
例子分很多種，有個(gè)人例子、名人例子、調(diào)查研究，還有排比論證。相對(duì)來(lái)說(shuō)，個(gè)人例子比較容易把握。
平時(shí)在同學(xué)們的作業(yè)中，我會(huì)經(jīng)常遇到各種各樣不走心的例子。我們來(lái)分析一個(gè)寫(xiě)法：
要論證：Doing part-time jobs can help university students earn pocket money.
[學(xué)生原稿]For example, once I took a part time job and earned a lot of money. With this money, I bought many things I like. That made me very happy.
這個(gè)例子論證無(wú)效，缺乏足夠的細(xì)節(jié)，說(shuō)服力不足，往往很難得分。那么如何改善呢?
首先，我們將原文中表示時(shí)間的once描述的再具體一些，比如last summer/when I was a freshman;其次，將a part-time job具體化，比如在星巴克或者學(xué)校旁邊的一家餐館做服務(wù)生;再者，關(guān)于a lot of money，可以避開(kāi)精確的數(shù)字，給到several thousand yuan，以及怎么花掉了這部分錢，比如買了自己最喜歡的吉他，都可以添加細(xì)節(jié)描述;在例子的最后結(jié)尾處，可以從自己的感受出發(fā)，比如表示自己因?yàn)樽黾媛氋嵙肆慊ㄥX感到很開(kāi)心，呼應(yīng)主題句，重新點(diǎn)題。
我們來(lái)看完善后的版本：
For example, this summer I took a part time job as a waiter in a local restaurant near my university. Two months later, I earned about four thousand yuan. With that sum of money, I bought a beautiful guitar and for the following few months, it will be unnecessary for me to ask my parents for pocket money any more. The experience of earning money from doing part-time jobs really made me happy.
這樣的例子在細(xì)節(jié)的描述上更加飽滿，條理更清晰，因此也更具有說(shuō)服力，當(dāng)然能贏來(lái)考官為你打call啦。
再給同學(xué)們看一個(gè)例子：
要論證：Watching TV for a long time does harm to children’s eyesight.
[學(xué)生原稿]For example, because I used to watch TV for a long time, I got nearsighted and finally I had to wear glasses.
[完善后的例子]For example, when I was in primary school, I liked watching TV very much. I remember once I was addicted to the famous cartoon Tom and Jerry, which was quite popular at that time. It was so fascinating that I often sat in front of the television for more than 2 hours every day. Finally, about two months later I realized I got nearsighted since I could not see clearly the formulas my teacher wrote on the blackboard. At last, I had to wear glasses, which made me feel so uncomfortable that it took me several weeks to get used to it.
以上，相信同學(xué)們對(duì)個(gè)人例子的細(xì)節(jié)強(qiáng)調(diào)清晰了很多，在此我強(qiáng)調(diào)一下展開(kāi)個(gè)人例子時(shí)5個(gè)注意要點(diǎn)：
1. 主題相關(guān)性：必須扣題并且符合基本邏輯
比如：?? a little boy once watched TV a lot, and finally he got cancer……
2. 時(shí)間：具體到某年
比如 last year/when I was seven years old/when I was in primary school;
3. 地點(diǎn)：給到具體地方，并附加一定解釋
比如this summer I learned TOEFL at New Oriental, which is specialized in English training;
4. 特定名詞：不管具體或抽象，給到名稱及描述
比如提到website，以www.superlearn.cn為例，要給到具體的解釋：it is a popular website in China and designed by New Oriental to help students practice TOEFL online;
5. 個(gè)人感受：事件對(duì)個(gè)人的影響，一般做為總結(jié)
比如：it was a great experience to practice TOEFL on SuperLearn。
細(xì)節(jié)是寫(xiě)個(gè)人例子的關(guān)鍵，我們對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)的追求，就是對(duì)分?jǐn)?shù)的追求。希望大家可以從本文中獲得思路，結(jié)合練習(xí)，追求細(xì)節(jié)，順利奪取目標(biāo)成績(jī)!
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